Chapter 236 – Review (Author Review Added)
Hello, I’m Mommu.
I registered this part in the service (free) category, but I don’t know if it’s correct that I can’t settle it this way.
If not, I hope you will forgive me with a generous heart, thinking that the last episode of the main story has been divided into two episodes.
It was the first completed work, so I had a lot of thoughts.
So, there are many things I want to say in the review, so I ended up writing a long story in a separate episode like this.
If you want to know why it’s so long, consider me a fuss…
I wrote it as I remembered it, so it may be a bit confusing.
It also contains spoilers, so please be forewarned when reading.
1. About the work
I think I mentioned it once, but in fact, this work was originally written for stress relief after writing something else. Around February, I first came across Nobelpia through a friend’s introduction, but I thought of writing in the middle of my school days, so I gave it a try.
The article I was going to post at first was a dark fantasy-style succubus lily harem with a lot of my shady taste, but after using it for a while, it seemed like it wasn’t a spirit, so I got irritated and started writing it without thinking.
Why did you write this? If you ask me, I just wanted to see a story like a CG house for adults sold for around 770 yen or 1320 yen at a site D or site F across the water. I started writing, wondering why something like this doesn’t exist, but after writing it, I definitely understood. It was in many ways unsuitable for writing a feature film.
The point of view was divided into two because, in fact, there are many CG collections with a point of view divided like this. For some reason, when people say NTR, they usually naturally include NTL. So I also started writing in a way that included the NTL point of view with the hero as the main character. As I wrote, there were changes.
To be honest, when I first thought about it, I thought porters were a good idea.
It is a cliché of Japanese exiles, but it was a little shocking as I thought that I had a good understanding of the ten virtue culture. It’s a genre I don’t know much about, but I can’t believe I didn’t know about this…
I’m a little sorry to those who enjoyed reading it, but in fact, there were a lot of problems inherent in this article. There was originally a long self-confession of about 5,000 characters about this part, but it was too long and not interesting, so I deleted it.
In summary, (1) a self-satisfied novel that I started writing without any base, (2) I started to write a story later because it became more popular than I thought, and (3) even if I wrote it in real time, the writing was drawn out, so I got inertia and recognized the problem late. (4) In the meantime, only Uni’s attack difficulty was unreasonably increased.
As I twisted my body as much as I could and tried to use it somehow, at some point I felt a sense of crisis that there would be about 150 episodes that only targeted Uni, and (5) I solved this problem with a hastily set up and forcibly increased the attack speed. (6) In the process, the story got twisted a lot, and a hero was urgently put forward as a person to solve it.
The result is this.
Yes… You’ve accumulated a lot of karma.
There may be more, but that’s all I can think of right now. Anyway, no one is wrong.
If the settings are weird or something seems out of place, this is all because of it. While the basic frame was weak, the writing collapsed as I tried to force it.
So, while I was writing the second half, I already thought that there was no going back. Thoughts of wanting to change it kept popping up in my head, but it sounded like nonsense to come this far and do a remake or year-round, and I somehow dragged it here with a sense of responsibility to finish it even if the ending would collapse.
If you’ve been thinking that maybe you should have done a remake or year round, I’m really sorry. Now, I’m not even sure what could have been better.
In the end, it was a matter of my mind. It is said that I started with no intention of going to PLUS, but since I eventually came to PLUS, I shouldn’t have written it like this.
I really learned a lot. I really learned by bumping into each other.
2. About the sequel
I’m not sure what to write.
If there’s one thing I’ve decided for sure though, it’s that I’ll start with a solid plot and make sure this doesn’t happen again.
I came this far after being really a parent, but I can’t do the same thing twice for those who forgave me for being able to do that once.
Talking specifically about the sequel, I have a lot of worries.
There are so many things I want to write, but I don’t know which one to choose.
Adult and non-adult works There are many things I want to write.
I would also like to write a story in which the only dream horse (incubus) protagonist who can only succeed against a succubus corrupts the heroines into a succubus, or a story in which the only male protagonist trains the sisters one by one in an imaginary fantasy convent.
I want to write something like a near-future sci-fi that restores the original body of a heroine of all ages (important) possessed by an android for sex. My personal point is that I keep this setting and use it for all ages without 19 scenes.
There were some people who said they wanted to see the academy or the show, but I really like that too. I’d like to try my hand at this one, but I don’t have any solid ideas yet.
In fact, NTR too… I want to write a short one without the absence of a double main character or plot. I want to write something like NTR about an aristocratic young lady (+sub-heroine) who got married of convenience while having a secret love affair with a servant… If I were to write it, it would be a very short story of about 30 episodes.
Maybe write something else. In fact, a friend recently threw me keywords like ‘prison’ and ‘villain girl’, but I’m more interested than I thought, so I’m thinking about it.
It may not be very fun, but the subject matter somehow draws me in.
So the conclusion is, I don’t know yet…
If you see something like that one day, I would appreciate it if you would think that you caught it.
3. Q&A
The order of Q&A was randomly placed.
Also, regarding settings, there are many things that were added and modified later, so please understand that setting conflicts may occur here and there.
〈 related to ending 〉
Q. Will Eric, Sera, and Ertina get married? Will there be children?
A. In fact, since we already had a happy ending, we didn’t bother thinking about the back story. So, I’d like to leave this to your imagination.
However, if you do get married, I wonder if it will be possible only when the human and horse fusion is settled a little more, at least institutionally. Even now, it almost feels like a de facto marriage.
Q. Do you work with Miri?
A. I’m sorry for Miri, but I don’t intend to do that. If it’s still a pity, it’s okay to imagine that there was.
Q. What does Eric think of the three heroes?
A. I regard you as a colleague in the most important moments of your life. Because I have overcome her wounds, at least I do not feel rejected or distanced from them.
Q. Will Yuni completely give up her romance and remain only her friend?
A. Uni. She is thinking of remaining only her friend.
Q. Is there a possibility that Jeren will meet Seria’s pupil?
A. I don’t think it’s impossible.
Q. Did Uni give you a cake? Does she have a meal together?
A. The cake was really an unexpected reaction to me… Actually, it didn’t mean much, and both Uni and Eric were from the countryside, so I just couldn’t eat it ㅠㅠ
We didn’t give it to each other and we couldn’t eat it together, but someday we’ll have something to eat together. Let’s just say we ate cake when we got together 10 years later.
Q. What about uni rings?
A. Jeren’s whereabouts became unclear as he was imprisoned in the Magic Tower. But since she doesn’t care anymore, she won’t bother looking for it.
〈 Setting and story related 〉
Q. What are the hero selection criteria?
A. Gule selects a young man who seems to have moderate potential. It will come out a little later, but after the bridle itself was twisted, a person with a high probability of defeat was deliberately selected for the maintenance of the demon king.
Q. Did Ertina lose to Uni because the heroines were strengthened by the power of bondage?
A. To be precise, it was more like being forced by the power of the devil. I would appreciate it if you could understand it with the feeling of releasing the limiter that often appears in comics.
Q. What was the goddess?
A. Detailed settings were added later, so there may be conflicts. First of all, the goddess is a kind of half-person, and her emotions are very rare compared to humans.
I made a bridle for the convenience of management, but when the bridle, a kind of AI, ran out of control without my knowledge, I had difficulty controlling it, and when I tried to get rid of it forcibly, the bridle resisted, and my survival instinct moved me to a completely different dimension.
Yes, to put it simply, it’s sexy…
Q. Where did the goddess go?
A. As I wrote above, I went to another dimension. I don’t have any concrete thoughts about where I’m going after the fact.
Q. Why did you make a bridle? What is a bridle?
A. There may also be conflicts in detailed settings. Originally, it is something like AI that selects and manages the person in charge of naturally occurring demons (the demon king) and the manager of humans and other heterogeneous tribes (warriors). I would appreciate it if you think that the direction is slightly twisted.
Q. Was Jeren affected by the bridle?
A. I am affected. In particular, becoming the Demon King was almost forced.
Q. How far did the bridle force the party members?
A. Bridle is basically amplifying what already exists, rather than planting something new.
In the case of the warrior’s neto wall, it would be appreciated if you could understand that it was slightly planted due to the development in the middle of the story as if the bridle greatly amplified it.
Q. Was the reason Seria/Arin/Yuni liked the hero because of his bondage?
A. In the case of Seria and Arin, it had some effect. However, rather than 100% to blame for the bridle, as I said earlier, it’s more like the bridle amplified the emotions. The reason why the two developed a certain liking for the hero was his pure side.
In Uni’s case, she liked Eric regardless of the bondage.
Q. Did the pattern disappear as the bridle disappeared?
A. Yes, they disappeared together. Since this was the purpose of the pattern magic, I would appreciate it if you could understand that it had done its job and disappeared together.
Q. To what extent can the demon king interfere with the bridle?
A. Interfering with the bondage depends more on the individual’s ability than the devil’s position. In the case of the demon king who developed the pattern magic, it was not because he was a demon king that he was able to interfere, but because the magician cadre developed with him had excellent magical abilities.
Of course, if you see that your skills have improved while surpassing the limit of your lifespan, you can see that it has an indirect effect.
Q. How long did the bridle last?
A. Let’s say it was before the beginning of history. I’m not sure of the exact year…
Q. What are the peer selection criteria?
A. This side is still selected as a person who is likely to be of help to the hero. However, that aspect is not the mental care part, but the combat power part…
The hero is selected among those who are easy to defeat. The reason why the companion standard is so fine is because this part is not a core part, but less degenerated.
Q. Was Yuni’s decision to stop attacking once at the castle on her own will or because of her restraints?
A. First of all, my intention was my will. After thinking about it, it seems that there is a point in saying that the hero shouldn’t die until he kills the demon king, so the bridle was blocked… At least, that was my intention.
Q. What is the meaning of the rose that remained to Uni?
A. I think it’s the result of a collision between the inertia of trying to write as expected (the existing capture plot, which was expected to be over 150 episodes) and the hastily reworked idea.
At first, I thought it was a minute trace of resistance to the bridle… But it seems to have become ambiguous as I overdo it in the second half.
Q. What is the intention of the engraving (pattern)?
A. It’s like the final masterpiece of a demon king who wanted to break the bridle. In my head, I thought it was made by two executives in the position of a demon king and a wizard, but even if you can’t break it right away, as generations pass, vines and roses overlap and the difficulty level gradually goes down…!
I deliberately made it parasitic to divine power, but until I came down to the current difficulty, everyone’s mentality was broken, so there was no hero who used it properly…
Q. Was there an increase in stamina in the pattern magic?
A. It is the result of a slight modification of the bridle, which is twisted in the direction of maintaining the iteration of the hero and the demon king. However, this side also left some room to prevent the demon king and wizard, who are the creators of magic, from being excluded from their bondage.
In other words, the bridle was made in an easy-to-use form and put into it.
Q. Why did the demon king want to become the demon king? What was he going to do if he survived?
A. I was debating whether or not to include this part in the main story, but in the end I left it out. Of course, the aspect that encouraged the bridle to become the demon king is the biggest. However, it has not been able to overcome the winds and waves of the years and has become corrupted… It is such an image.
The entire hero party was mentally shattered when they learned the truth about the chain, but the demon king was particularly angry at the fact that he was a puppet. So he set it up like he pursued a life without any intervention. Had he survived, he would have tried to live a normal life.
Q. Was Ertina really a shady elf? Did she deliberately act calculated to occupy the hero’s side?
A. I didn’t mean it… I didn’t mean it… I heard that in the later stories and slightly intended it, but in the main story, it was a pure heart.
Q. Ertina feels like Uni’s future. Is that intentional?
A. To some extent, yes. Ertina was put in as a character who was similar to Uni but made the opposite choice, and she wanted to deal with that point a bit more centrally, but as she progressed in attacking Uni, it became difficult to save her.
Q. What is the remaining lifespan of the Four Heavenly Kings?
A. In fact, the lifespan of the Four Heavenly Kings is equivalent to stopping aging through the power of the demon king, so they age normally now that the demon king is gone.
Once changed from a different species to a monster with the settings in your head, the lifespan of the existing species will follow.
Since Ertina is an elf, she should live a little longer…
Q. Was it the function of the chain that the porter’s words in episode 135 or Yuni’s accident drove her to one side?
A. To be honest, I didn’t think about it when I wrote it. After writing it, it seemed to fit better, so I set it that way. If you think the description is ambiguous, it’s because I took and pasted the settings and corrected them again, so something awkward happened…
〈IF related to 〉
Q. If Sera was next to the Demon King after his chain was broken, would he have helped save him?
A. If Sera himself had intuition that the bridle was breaking, he would not have been able to move easily due to the shock.
However, Sera sorted out her feelings with the Demon King, and above all, had opposing ideas about the harmony between humans and demons, so I think she probably didn’t actively interfere with his death.
Q. If it was a repeat ending, what was the fate of Eric and the remaining Four Heavenly Kings?
A. Actually, even though it was a repeat ending, I didn’t assume that Eric would become the Skull Knight. Perhaps he died or became an existence under the Four Heavenly Kings.
The former Four Heavenly Kings will disappear. Since their demon king is dead, their lifespan will flow again as mentioned above, so I wonder if they will die of natural causes before the next demon king rises.
Q. A fragment about the demon king
A. I wanted to include a story while conceiving the idea for the demon king, but I gave up because I thought it would drag on. As of now, no plans!
Q. If Jeren became the Demon King, what kind of monsters would the three of them become?
A. I briefly described it in Jeren’s dream in the second half, but deliberately didn’t mention the race.
First of all, the direction I was thinking of is that Seria is a succubus, Arin is an undead, and Uni is a demon.
Q. If the hero didn’t have a bridle, would he have been able to become a great fighter like he is now?
A. Probably couldn’t. I wouldn’t have been able to grow because there was no trials… I’d like to.
Q. I heard that Ertina was an added character. If Ertina wasn’t there, would Yuni have stayed by Eric’s side?
A. I briefly wrote about it above, but in fact, all the four kings are added characters. Originally, the Four Heavenly Kings hadn’t been decided, and everyone made them simple before they appeared and put them into the story. The character added last in the order is correct.
I think the story wouldn’t have changed much if Ertina hadn’t been there. Because it was decided to pass all three in the big flow…
Q. What about the 4-person face-to-face scene?
A. Sorry…! Not currently in the plan!
〈 Other 〉
Q. What is your next project?
A. I wrote above…!
Q. What was the original ending you were thinking of?
A. In the early days (before Luella appeared), I actually thought that the porter would take everything from the hero and become the hero. After Luella appeared, the goddess setting was roughly set, but it was not specific, but it was slightly changed in the direction of the warrior killing the demon king, and after adding the bridle setting, the direction was changed to an ending that even broke this. Up until this point, I hadn’t set a specific direction for the porter, and I was just sticking with the image of living well anyway.
After the Uni discovery scene, I thought I should separate the two endings.
Q. What was the fate of Yuni from the previous porter ending?
A. I’m really sorry to tell you about this part. This is really what I was trying to do blatantly. I tried to please everyone, but it turned out like this. It was a really arrogant thought.
Q. Are there really no side stories?
A. For now, yes.
If I ever have to touch this work again later, I’d rather do a remake than a side story… I’m really sorry for the work.
First of all, the Q&A is like this.
Actually, I was a little nervous because I thought there would be no questions, but I’m glad there are many.
It’s not that I didn’t like it that much because I couldn’t solve it in the main story.
If I don’t have any questions I expected, I’d like to add one more:
Q. Who was Uni’s first teacher?
A. In the initial plan, the first teacher was the current Ertina position. However, as the story changed a little, the existence became ambiguous, and in the end, I changed it to the position of the Four Heavenly Kings (the Four Heavenly Kings who suddenly disappeared at the end) from the previous war, but I did not know how long the story would be to add a new character in the second half, so I omitted it.
There were some conflicts with additional life settings, so the identity of the first teacher is unknown in the end…
4. Closing
As I was writing, there were a lot of things I wanted to write about in a review, but I can’t remember when I actually wrote it. There seems to be a lot of unfinished stories, but I’ll stop at this.
Actually, I thought my mentality was weak. But surprisingly, even when the controversy was in full swing, it wasn’t that hard mentally. Maybe it was because I felt that my writing was lacking.
Thank you very much to those who enjoyed reading it. Even though there were many twists and turns, I really want to thank you for being satisfied.
I caused a lot of trouble to those who were dissatisfied with my clumsy attitude and lack of writing. I think those who said they would never want to see it again and those who said they would let it go just this once must have been deeply hurt. I bow my head in a very sincere apology.
We can’t go back to the past, but at least we won’t make the same mistakes again.
I hope it has improved more than before writing, and I will cut it short.
If our hearts reach again someday, I hope to see you then.
Thank you
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I’ve been thinking about it again.
It seems that he kept thinking that he was a sacrificial character for the courier.
So it seems that those feelings were buried even when I gave an answer inadvertently.
I should have thought of the readers first, not the characters… I’m really ashamed.
I am very sorry for constantly changing my attitude and showing my ugly side.
We apologize for the careless talk about the back story after the after story.
Even though I deliberately wrote it like an open ending, I couldn’t maintain a consistent attitude.
I would greatly appreciate it if you would think that there is nothing set about the back story, as I intended when I wrote this article.
It may have already been a late response, but I hope to alleviate some of the embarrassment and discomfort.
I promised not to be greedy, but I made the same mistake again.
I will look back and reflect on myself.
I wrote it in the author’s review, but after realizing that it could be turned off in the options, I moved it to the text.
